You’ve got some great stories to tell but need to sort out grammar and spelling in a big way first. Some examples that are obvious; it’s coarse fishing not course fishing, capitalise I when in the first person ie When I arrived not When i arrived, understand the difference between too (meaning also at the end of a sentence) and to as part of a verb eg I went to the river or I wanted to catch a big chub compared with Dave caught a big chub too. Punctuation is lacking. Try reading out what you’ve written, and if you find yourself getting out of breath it’ll indicate where you need commas, which are pauses. Otherwise you’ll get a sentence like this one which goes on and on without any pauses and you get more and more out of breath until you’re gasping then you collapse in a heap wondering what went wrong until your mate calls an ambulance to rescue you. (Deep breath) This all seems pedantic but most of your potential readers will not get past two sentences if it’s badly written. Some sentences have no verbs!
As to style, it would help to set the scene at the start of each mini-article. For example, instead of getting stuck into the story just say what it’s going to be about. If you want a first class example of how to write simply and clearly just pick up a copy of The Sun. Not everyone’s taste maybe, but the writers are very proficient at telling a story in a way that grabs your attention in simple English.
TF_Dodge.
